wow, feel that bass :D
you deserve more than what rating 2.16 you currently have, its a nice piece with a lot of potential, i think at this point all that matters is that you can string from one idea to another and enjoy the freedom of making music, because it sounds more original this way and artists who enjoy something different will pick up on this which is a good thing because no one wants to be the same, however if you did develop a more moderate form to the song, i.e. if it followed the widely used structure for this genre of music then people will like it more because they will see it as more familiar, anyway im blabbing on, what you need to do is add some emphasis on your build up and vary your dynamics (volumes), plus that screechy sound at 01:25 ish is quite painful on the ears so maybe sort that out, but ye otherwise sounds decent, i think build up the bass whilst quietly building up and putting in the main synth instruments and ideas in there somewhere so it all builds together then you can have them all drop together rather than stopping the song at 01:08 to enter a new section, it will help the rhythm and flow of the song
but ye theyre just my ideas
i like the song, keep up the good stuff :)
8/10 (composition)
5/5 (ideas)